Writing T2 W7.

For reading this week we had to write a short narrative that had 3 paragraphs in it. Here is my work...

Paragraph 1:

It is 3.00 and time for the children to go home, the bell rings and Jacob races to the gate and waits for his mum to come and pick him up. Jacob's mum pulls up. Hi Jacob mum shouts with the music up so loud that the whole school could hear. MUM! Jacob shouted back, TURN THE MUSIC DOWN! Mum turns down the music and Jacob jumps in. Hey sweetie how was your day? Good I guess, says Jacob. So um I Jacob, mum says in a voice like she was waiting for a reaction. What, I say? Well...I am going to buy you a new goldfish! a...a...goldfish? Yes, says mum, a goldfish, I thought since you love animals so much that you could get into the habit of fish.  Oh alright, sighs Jacob.  Mum and Jacob pull up to the pet store. First, said mum, you need to pick out a fish tank and decorations, you then need to get some water conditioner. OK, OK, shouts Jacob. Mum walks away looking at stuff for Jacobs aunt's guinea pig. Jacob grabs a trolley and walks slowly to the aisle.

Jacob grabs all of what he needs and goes home.

Paragraph 2

The next day…

Mum wakes Jacob up and they get ready to go back to the pet store. A while later they both jump into the car. Mum and Jacob pull up at the pet store and walk in through the door. Jacob, says mum, go and pick out a fish. OK MUM, Jacob shouted. Don't shout Jacob, whispered mum. Jacob walks up to the aisle with all the fish. There are all sorts of fish but what to choose from. Jacob spots a bright goldfish shimmering in the light. MUM, shouted Jacob. WHAT DID I SAY!, mum shouted back. Sorry, said mum. Mum and Jacob go home with the goldfish in a bag. Jacob set up the tank yesterday so he put the fish in his new tank. Hey mum, says Jacob, what should I name him? Actually, said mum, the worker said he is a she. Oh, said Jacob. Name her Goldie, said mum, OK i will, whispered Jacob. Jacob leaves the room. The cat walks in. The cat's name is Sammy. Sammy walks up to the fish tank.

There is no lid on the tank so Sammy puts a paw in the tank and tries to grab Goldie, Goldie hides under a shipwreck decoration. Sammy tries to swipe at Goldie but Goldie darts across the tank. Suddenly Sammy finally grabs Goldie and throws her on the floor. Goldie is unable to breath.

Paragraph 3

Jacob walks into the room and see’s Goldie on the floor. Jacob then turns his head over to Sammy and shouts
SAMMY WHAT HAVE YOU DONE! Sammy runs out the door and Jacob runs and gets mum. Oh dear, whispers mum.
Jacob pouts and says, what do we do with her now? We might have to flush her down the toilet, say mum.
OK, wipers Jacob. Mum, Jacob walks to the toilet well holding Goldie. Jacob puts her into the toilet.  It’s OK Jacob I will
take you back to the pet store tomorrow OK, said mum. WAIT!shouts Jacob, what, what, says mum. She is OK. Goldie starts
breathing and she starts to swim around. Jacob picks up Goldie and puts her back into her tank Goldie is happy to be
alive but Sammy got put outside.

Thanks for reading, what was your favourite part?